What happened
The FAA’s narrative, in sentence case. The FAA writes it in capitals and removes private details.
Narrative: on October 22, 1996, at approximately 1730 MST, stephen morrell and james koontz, along with two other parachutists, departed from a jump plane at 8,000 feet AGL at Eloy, Arizona. Witnesses observed two canopies collide. Messrs. Koontz and morrell hit heads, rendering both jumpers unconscious. Both jumpers impacted the ground with parachutes fully deployed approximately 11/2-2 miles east of the Eloy airport. Mr. Morrell was declared dead at the scene. Mr. Koontz was airlifted to a phoenix, Arizona hospital, where he died the same evening. Both parachutes were examined by tony frost, dpre, who found no defects. Both parachutists had borrowed equipment which they packed themselves. Incident closed.
As the FAA filed it
NARRATIVE: ON OCTOBER 22, 1996, AT APPROXIMATELY 1730 MST, STEPHEN MORRELL AND JAMES KOONTZ, ALONG WITH TWO OTHER PARACHUTISTS, DEPARTED FROM A JUMP PLANE AT 8,000 FEET AGL AT ELOY, ARIZONA. WITNESSES OBSERVED TWO CANOPIES COLLIDE. MESSRS. KOONTZ AND MORRELL HIT HEADS, RENDERING BOTH JUMPERS UNCONSCIOUS. BOTH JUMPERS IMPACTED THE GROUND WITH PARACHUTES FULLY DEPLOYED APPROXIMATELY 11/2-2 MILES EAST OF THE ELOY AIRPORT. MR. MORRELL WAS DECLARED DEAD AT THE SCENE. MR. KOONTZ WAS AIRLIFTED TO A PHOENIX, ARIZONA HOSPITAL, WHERE HE DIED THE SAME EVENING. BOTH PARACHUTES WERE EXAMINED BY TONY FROST, DPRE, WHO FOUND NO DEFECTS. BOTH PARACHUTISTS HAD BORROWED EQUIPMENT WHICH THEY PACKED THEMSELVES. INCIDENT CLOSED.